Story genesis: I love it when a story suggests itself from everyday life. I was on the train, when sitting opposite me was a large chap who had a woman's diamond engagement ring on his little finger. He saw that I had noticed it and appeared uncomfortable. It wasn't clear whether he was going to a situation where he would need it or coming away from something where it had been thrown away and he was looking after it. I wonder...
Broad shoulders with
muscles visible under the t-shirt, taut against the train’s motion. A woman’s engagement ring gleamed on his
smallest finger. He twitched it,
sweating.
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I love the way you've taken these acute observations and made something honed and polished out of them.
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